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ambiguously this is good word, but a slightly awkward sounding one. Would you just let the snow fall already? the rest of the poem is wispy, but this is blatant. ...

*stares* :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: by the way, he's still angry at me. my god, it's an effing baseball game.... but this cheered me up

Their thoughts focus on the future, The past is only a distant memory, And the present is forever. Gravel rocks dig into their bare feet as they oblige the will ...

the glowing, burning, fiery though soon to be stone lava of wakefulness. the glowing, burning, fire, though soon to be stone, lava of wakefulness ...or something like that. because what ...

The first one isn't an haiku by rhythm patterns, and it's also a bit repetitive: Majestic horses ok...that's good. there are horses Stampede if you come near still good - ...

I agree that the situations of your day and you life at this time are pressurizing. These are great insults, but is this actually a poem? It seems as if, ...

This was beautiful. I loved all of this, and could relate almost painstakingly to the last stanza. It moved me a lot, I can feel the speaker's emotions as well ...

No person could sooth me quite right any more, For that someone who could long since passed through my door. Was I such a trifle that he could not stay? ...

“ did you ever notice that the most precious people have raisin hands, scars on their bodies & souls, and nothing to show for it ?” fix the quotations, and ...

Causing devastation, destruction and Death! the exclamation point makes it seem a bit over dramatic. all in all, this poem has a prophet-y and ancient feeling to it, which is ...

Okay - I'm a line break fiend, so this sort of irks me. Another thing - Ink. Drips. Down. how about this - "Ink drips down." it's the same effect, ...

I don't really like staccato rhythm, but you handled it well. I have a slight feeling about what you were talking about, but for those who aren't farmiliar with your ...

This is beautiful. And the "volume" that timjim speaks of was at the perfect level for this poem. I'm just a mediocore range, but this was soft, gentle, graceful - ...

This has a beautiful meaning, but some of the lines were a bit awkward - lacking form or flow. examples: One I cannot describe, But I do not wear armor ...

This was a bit too repetitive near the end, but I loved the beginning. I also belive you need to replace the world "cheesy". I mean, I use it all ...